I was forced to rate your story a ZERO!anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 07:26:44As everyone else is saying grammer and spelling however I like the story and was able to keep track right to the end, now I’m hoping you continue this as there are many different ways you could take this, could even be made into a short novel. Anime porn Your use of language and spelling are so bad that it makes reading it quite painful to me. Your use of language and spelling are so bad that it makes reading it quite painful to me. please fix it and repost once corrected so can be enjoyed.«12» You just need a proofreader in my opinion.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 06:48:44holy shit, sounded great to me at the beginning, near the end I couldn’t stand trying to make sense of it please revise this, or at least make the 2nd chapter
