AS IS THIS WAS WAY TO SHORT AND WAY TO RUSHED AND NEEDS TO BE DELETED.anonymous readerReport 2013-07-15 21:15:41not good this reads like it should be chapter two not one. Anime sex WHAT KIND OF SEXUAL EXPERIENCE DO THEY HAVE. WHO ARE THEY? DID THEY EVER FEEL ANYTHING FOR EACH OTHER BEFORE THIS? WHAT KIND OF RELATIONSHIP DID THEY HAVE BEFORE THIS? delete and rewrite using a good editor before reposting THEN IT MIGHT BE WORTH READING.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 18:21:12Not really much to say that hasn’t already been said. YOU NEED A LOT MORE DETAIL AND AND A MUCH LONGER CHAPTER TO TELL THE STORY. personality and character traits, how they interact in normal situations, etc. WHERE ARE THE PARENTS? HOW OLD ARE THEY? HOW OLD ARE THEY? DID THEY EVER FEEL ANYTHING FOR EACH OTHER BEFORE THIS?
